What a line can do

Once upon a time in art school, our teacher instructed us to create an entire drawing with a single line: no picking up the pen or pencil. I drew a tree, badly. When she came over to inspect, I told her I had no idea how to do what she wanted, that it didn’t seem possible to render anything well without several lines. Wordlessly, iconically, Mr. Miyagi-ly, she turned over a page in my notebook and drew a gumball machine; not a Norman Rockwell gumball machine, but a quivering, quirky one I could easily see greeting guests in the home of Tim Burton.

We at One Story are certainly aware of the power of the single story. These days I’ve been thinking about the kinetic potential of the single line. I have favorites that have forced entry into my head for days, sometimes years, that have on occasion colored my entire appreciation of an otherwise lukewarm story or novel. A line that makes me agonize, how did the author even think of this? Writers who excavate everyday dirt and turn over gems are few and far between. Tom Robbins, a man who squeezes the tar out of words, who has never met a noun he couldn’t change into a verb, said “The only success with which a writer might be meaningfully concerned is…whether or not, when their nouns meet their verbs, the verbs yell out, ‘Gotcha, baby!’”

I began pulling books down from my shelves so I could make a list of “gotcha” lines. Many of my favorite were dismissed after coming to find they were culminations of a dependant series of lines, or airy distillations of great ideas rather than catch-able, tangible lines, or just plain not as good as I remembered. I excluded playwrights and poets. I kept to single sentences. Here are some I came up with:

“They pause, motionless, watching each other, and for a moment she is precisely what she appears to be: a pregnant woman kneeling in a kitchen with her three-year-old son, who knows the number four.”
-from Michael Cunningham’s The Hours

“She has important hair.”
-from Don DeLillo’s White Noise

“Usually we were guilty and frightened because there was something wrong with us and we didn’t know what it was, but that day we had the feeling of men who had worked.”
-from Denis Johnson’s Jesus’ Son

“But it is just two lovers, holding hands and in a hurry to reach their car, their locked hands a starfish leaping through the dark.”
-from John Updike’s Rabbit, Run

“She was a girl who for a ringing phone dropped exactly nothing.”
-from J.D. Salinger’s “A Perfect Day for Bananafish”

“She wrote to him fairly regularly, from a paradise of triple exclamation points and inaccurate observations.”
-from J.D. Salinger’s “For Esme–with Love and Squalor”

“When she crept back to his bed, he was sleeping like a boy, the way men did.”
-from Lorrie Moore’s “The Jewish Hunter”

“Understand your cat is a whore and can’t help you.”
-from Lorrie Moore’s “Amahl and the Night Visitors: A Guide to the Tenor of Love.”

“Sucking her thumb like a child (her age nineteen last November), she lay in this good world, this new world, this world at the end of the tunnel, until a desire to see it or forestall it drove her, tossing her blankets, to guide herself to the window, and there, looking out upon the garden, where the mist lay, all the windows open, one fiery-bluish, something murmuring in the distance, the world of course, and the morning coming, ‘Oh,’ she cried, as if in pain.”
-from Virginia Woolf’s “A Woman’s College from the Outside.”

“To express grief on skates seemed almost impossible, and Fenstad liked that.”
-from Charles Baxter’s “Fenstad’s Mother.”

As I am a wise grasshopper, I cut out that gumball machine my art teacher drew and have it hanging by my mirror. It is battered and bruised. When I forget how powerful and innovative a simple line can be, I look at it and cry. No I don’t. Normally, I am nowhere near it. But, I am happy to have it.

Do you have a line that has forced entry into your consciousness? Please share.

Issue #90: Love is in the Ether

What struck me, the first time I read “Love is in the Ether,” was the clean narrative style, and the simple beauty of the language. The words and phrases on the pages here have been pruned and trimmed and cared for in a way that, like Raymond Carver and Amy Hempel’s work, looks deceptively easy. It reminded me of something one of my first writing teachers, Blanche Boyd said, about how to write a story. “Write a beautiful sentence,” she said. “Then write another one, and another, and another.” In a good short story, every sentence is labored over, until it reads so smoothly that you barely notice when the magic happens, and then it does, in spades. This story is adorned with sentences that stayed with me, long after I put it down:

“Oh yes, you continue to produce love, in buckets and gallons, as if you were still needed. Someone forgot to inform your heart: you’ve been laid off.”

“There is always one in the front to put her hand on your foot when you read a story aloud, reverently, as though it were a precious thing, encased in a jeweled sheath instead of a dusty shoe.”

“He held it, you let him, why not?”

“You are a beginner in this world.”

In twelve short pages, Laurence Dumortier is able to make us care enormously about Beatrice–following her through her grief and out the other side–and she does it by stringing these lines together, like perfect beads on a necklace.

Our publishing schedule

Dear Readers,

A number of you have emailed us recently to ask about our publishing schedule. We’ve fallen behind for several reasons, both big and small, but never fear! One Story has a wonderful line up of stories coming this summer, and will soon be back on track. So please be patient. We will be catching up shortly–you will be receiving a few stories two weeks apart in July and August, and then we will resume our ‘every three weeks.’

Cheers,
Hannah

Adventures in the Slush: My Favorite Flaw

After reading 100 unsolicited submissions out of any given slush pile–be it science fiction, literary fiction, and I’m assuming, any other kind of fiction–you begin to notice a few “classic mistakes” over and over.

Today, in the hopes of inspiring you stalwart writers to the glory of a well-done and well-placed piece, I am going to list my first favorite “classic mistakes” of the decent slush submission. Often, these submissions are “good”, meaning either really well-written or really interesting, but not both. Nothing is more frustrating than an interesting piece whose plot turns to pot in the last five pages, or a well-written piece with a few minor but glaring errors. Without further adieu, I bring you …

#1 CLASSIC MISTAKE: THESAURUS-CITY

Now, this mistake I understand. You have spent maybe 85 hours on a story, maybe more. You’ve read each line at least fourty times, you’ve marked the passages that seem iffy, you’ve eliminated all the major thematic or structural flaws.

But for some reason, you have used the word “speckle” fourty five times in your piece. The first fourty four sound natural–your story COMMANDS each of the first fourty four uses–but the last one, eh.

Another word could go here.

And so begins the slippery slope of the mistake I like to call, “thesaurus city”. After that first shift+f7 you find yourself focusing in on every word that bothers you.

Why not? you think. Shift+f7. A flash in the pan later, and you’ve replaced a word or phrase with a similar word or phrase helpfully suggested by Mr Word-bot.

Tell me, gentle readers .. Do you see the glaring “thesaurized” phrase in the preceeding paragraph? I do. Technically correct, yet idiomatically inappropriate, it jumps off the page and attacks the part of the temple wherein rests residual stress. With none of the humor of calling a one-hit-wonder “Flash in the pan Gordon”, or none of the thematic interreferencing of saying the gold rush ended like a flash in the pan, or any real reason to have used such an idiom, surrounded as it were with historical context and the weight of reader expectations, I replaced one phrase with another.

To replace “speckle” with “constellate”, or “bright” with “undimmed” (“her undimmed smile lit up her face”), is to leap verily from your written pages and give a bloody nose to the poor editorial assistant assigned your manuscript.

Please, thesaurize with great caution!

Tonight: FREE ICE CREAM IN BROOKLYN!

TONIGHT! One Story and Park-Lit 2007 proudly presents an outdoor reading and ice cream social at JJ Byrne Park.

Featuring Rebecca Barry, Owen King, and Darin Strauss

At JJ Byrne Park, Park Slope, Brooklyn
5th Avenue and 3rd Street
Wednesday, June 27, 2007 @ 6:30PM

Please join us in front of the Old Stone House in JJ Byrne Park in Park Slope, Brooklyn, for readings by three celebrated One Story writers and three flavors of Uncle Louie G’s ice cream (free to attendees while it lasts). This reading is part of Park-Lit, a summer outdoor reading series sponsored by Open City, Mr. Beller’s Neighborhood, and the New York City Department of Parks & Recreation.

Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie wins Orange Prize

Author of One Story #27 “Transition to Glory” and Half of a Yellow Sun Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie was recently announced as the winner of the 2007 Orange Broadband Prize for Fiction.

A huge congratulations are extended to Ms Adichie for snagging the top honors this year; her first novel Purple Hibiscus was shortlisted in 2004. You can find Half of a Yellow Sun at powell’s.

Later, with Rebecca Barry

When last we visited Rebecca Barry, her novel in stories Later, at theBar had just received a glowing review in The New York Times Book Review. We wondered what it is like for an author after receiving such a review. Does it influence book sales? Does it impact word of mouth and if so, how much? Upon leaving the house, do blue birds alight on her shoulders? We asked Rebecca to update us on any corresponding changes to her book sales, life, or ornithological prowess. Here, she pontificates on the impact a review makes in her own words:

“Here are my thoughts on that review, a month after the fact.

The first great thing about a review like that is the validation. I burst into tears when I read it. Then I ran across the street to the public library where my husband was working and showed him the review and he cried. I had been preparing for the worst, like we all do when we put something we love so much and have worked on for years out into the world. And when I got such a positive response from such a great publication, was more than I could have hoped for. I just sat down and said, thank you, thank you, thank you, thank you, to every god I could think of, plus Danielle Trussoni, who wrote the review. Then, when it was an Editor’s Pick in the Times a week later, I was pretty much over the moon.

You would think this would make any bad press that followed insignificant, but I have to admit that when, a month later, the book got a much less favorable review in the LA Times, it was still really hard and unpleasant, etc. But the interesting thing was that when I put the two reviews side by side, (naturally, I got out the NYTBR review again to make myself feel better) I realized that they both brought up a lot of the same things about the book. It’s just that one person really loved those things about the book and thought they worked, and the other person simply didn’t. So in the end, you just have to accept that not everyone is going to like your book. (Other people probably already know this already. I’m a slow learner.) I think you just make a decision about who you’re going to believe, and if it’s your mother or your friends, or the random person who writes to you saying they loved your book, or your good reviews, then you go with that rather than the cranky ones.

In terms of sales, after the review came out there was a spike in sales, and we went back to press twice in the first three weeks. Now, in the book’s sixth week since publication, the numbers are holding steady, at about half what they were that first week after the review. My impression is (and this comes from the numbers as well as talking to booksellers) that a good review will give you a good two or three weeks, and it definitely helps, but word of mouth is what really sells books. I think the same probably goes for negative press–a bad review might sting for a week or so, but word of mouth can overcome that too. If a friend tells you to read a book, you’re more likely to read it, regardless of what you’ve read about it. I also think that reviews have a cumulative affect. A good review in The New York Times makes people make a mental note about your book. Another good review in a local paper makes them think, “Ah yes, I meant to buy that book.” A reading or event, or a friend saying, “I loved that book,” might just push them over the edge. At readings a few people have come up to me and said, “I read the review in the Times/People and I’ve been meaning to get the book, but when I saw you were reading, it gave me a good excuse to actually buy it.”

The other thing I’ll say is this. Basically, my dream came true. I worked very hard for a long time on a book that I’m finally pleased with. And then I got a great review in the New York Times Book Review, which was more than I ever could have hoped for. And I was completely happy. And then a few days later I was standing in my tiny kitchen that needs renovation, trying to get the laundry together, and I realized that the thing about your dream coming true is that in a way, everything changes, and nothing does. I don’t mean this to diminish the review in any way–it was and is the biggest thing that’s ever happened to me and I’m still really thankful/thrilled about it. But my life isn’t that different, and I think this is true of good reviews and bad ones. If there’s a good review, even a great one, you get a fabulous high and it pushes you into a new level of attention, and it helps to stop and enjoy the moment and be totally grateful that that happened. But you still have to do the laundry and try to keep your one year old from putting his face in the toilet. And if there’s a bad review, it hurts your feelings and makes you mad and defensive for a while, but chances are you can still do most of the things that made you happy before the review came out—eat good food, enjoy your friends and family, have sex, and find a new dream and keep writing. Because for better or worse, most of us keep writing and working and making our art, no matter what people say about it, which is what makes us the valiant, courageous, hopeful idiots we are.”

Grab a free ice cream cone (courtesy Uncle Louie G’s)and hear Rebecca Barry read along with Owen King and Darin Strausse next Wednesday the 27that One Story and Park Lit’s Summer Park reading in Park Slope where we will answer, among other questions, how many times can you say the word ‘park’ in one sentence?

The Age-Old Simultaneous Submissions Question

A few years ago, I told my friend Jonathan that I did not simultaneously submit my stories. Like a good girl, I submitted one story to one journal each time and waited and waited and waited.

“That’s the most ridiculous thing I’ve ever heard,” he said. “When you’re out looking for a job, do you send one resume out at a time?”

It can take up to one year to hear back from one literary journal, so if you are serious about ever being published, you should be submitting to more than one place at a time.

One Story’s policy is that we allow simultaneous submissions, but you MUST let us know as soon as your piece is accepted somewhere else.

There’s a great website called www.duotrope.com which provides a searchable database of more than a thousand magazines. You can filter out the magazines that will accept simultaneous submissions. This site is also great because it can also filter out temporarily closed markets (for instance, we stop accepting submissions June 1 – but will begin again on September 1).

If you go through the list you’ll find a lot of great journals that accept simultaneous submissions, magazines that have won many awards. But if you REALLY want to send your story to that no-simultaneous-submissions magazine, I suggest you follow their guidelines. That’s my opinion, but I’m sure there are others–

Do you follow the submission guidelines, or do you consider the guidelines largely ridiculous?

Petition to change the location of the cracks; Interfictions

If you’re like me, and think the characters and structure in most fiction act way too reasonably, toss a new collection of stories called “Interfictions” in your beach bag. Each story is a revelation on what narrative can do.

Consider the love story between a man and a lake, as told from the point of view of the lake, in Csilla’s Kleinheincz’s deftly observed “A Drop of Rasberry.”

Consider Leslie What’s “Post Hoc,” in which a woman mails herself to her ex-boyfriend. The boyfriend is not home, so the dutiful postman leaves a note and she ends up spending night after night in the post office, making new friends and eventually working there.

This collection is magic; one of the editors fittingly dedicates it to Kelly Link, fiction’s masterful prestidigitator. “Interfictions” is published by Interstitial Arts Foundation, who defines interstitial fiction as “work that falls in the interstices-between the cracks- of recognized commercial genres.” For those of us who prefer unconventional story telling, this is a breath of fresh air until the blessed day the cracks either get bigger or disappear.

For more information, check out Interstitial Arts dot org, or for a live rendering, attend the Interfictions reading Wednesday, June 20th at the eternally crowded KGB Bar, part of their Fantastic Fiction reading series.

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